Hi Louis - just a couple of pointers: I think you need to avoid making judgements about the likelihood of a theory being 'correct' or 'better' - rather, just use good supporting evidence to demonstrate how it's possible to argue that a theory relates. For example, you seem sceptical that the truck might be a figment of the David's imagination in that it represents his fears about his marriage, but later you're talking about 'bullying' and David's masculinity - both these theories actually support the first theory that his truck is 'about' his marriage and his role within it. I also think that you need to be careful too with the language you choose - as I don't think it's fair to say David is a 'coward' - isn't more fair to say that film is about David's fear that he might be a coward, which is why he ultimately takes on the truck? So - in academic writing, it's about maintaining a more balanced, more nuanced tone throughout and keeping ideas open and 'in play' as opposed to shutting things down and concluding things to be 'self-evident' or 'the truth'.
Hi Louis - just a couple of pointers: I think you need to avoid making judgements about the likelihood of a theory being 'correct' or 'better' - rather, just use good supporting evidence to demonstrate how it's possible to argue that a theory relates. For example, you seem sceptical that the truck might be a figment of the David's imagination in that it represents his fears about his marriage, but later you're talking about 'bullying' and David's masculinity - both these theories actually support the first theory that his truck is 'about' his marriage and his role within it. I also think that you need to be careful too with the language you choose - as I don't think it's fair to say David is a 'coward' - isn't more fair to say that film is about David's fear that he might be a coward, which is why he ultimately takes on the truck? So - in academic writing, it's about maintaining a more balanced, more nuanced tone throughout and keeping ideas open and 'in play' as opposed to shutting things down and concluding things to be 'self-evident' or 'the truth'.
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